इंसान की रग रग से वाकिफ कराऐ
एक स्त्री आईने में खुद को निहारे
देख देख आईना फिर मुस्काये
आया गुस्सा उसको बड़ा
कुंडित स्वर में आईने से पूछा
क्यों मुस्काये तू इतना बड़ा
आईना बोला , तू सोचती है तुझमे है नशा बड़ा
पर है तुझको खुद पर गुररूर बड़ा, ये यौवन नही रहना सदा
श्रृंगार, सज संवर कर खड़ी है सामने, लगती मुझको बनावटी तेरी अदा
गुस्से में वो बुदबुदाई, ऊँचे स्वर में फिर चिल्लाई
कुछ उलझी सी, कुछ नासमझी में , मन ही मन मे फुसफुसाई
बात तो तेरी कड़वी है, पर सत्य भी है बड़ी
सुन आईना , स्थाम्बित सा रह गया खड़ा
और फिर निची आवाज़ में बोल पड़ा
जो देखता हूँ, वही दिखलाता हूँ
भीतर का दर्पण कहलाता हूँ
पहने तू लिबास झूठ का ओढे खड़ी है
ईर्ष्या, द्वेष, षड्यंत्र से भरी पड़ी है
कैसे कह दू कि तु सुंदर बड़ी है
Ati sundar😊😊👌
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Thanku sir😊
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Sir, You write so well. Here is a contest for u nd I want you to participate in it.
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That’s great! Which contest it is.😊😊
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Aagman group h ek on fb vha pr ye contest h apko page pr dikh jyga. Apni 2 poem send krni h bio nd pic. Anthology mh your poem will be published then nd no fees for that. You write well sir , give it a try👍
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Thank you so much.. i will definitely look for it on FB and most probably will participate as well.
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Good luck sir👍
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I have sent the request to join the group. Waiting for approval.
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You will get sir .
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In the mean time if you can suggest me, which two I shall send. Little confused.
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Okk, sir . Sure. Which two you want to send?
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In below mentioned four I want to select two..
“पहचान”
“परित्यक्त”
“दीपशिखा”
“एक था वो पागल”
You tell, your opinion 😊
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I have to go through this poems first , then I will tell u . Vaise 2 one best lgi ab tk k 2,3 .Done . Masterpiece h sir
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Ok. Done.
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I also need help. Which poem should I send?. Which 2 is suitable . Your opinion
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Ohh you are also submitting? Name me the poems. Will read them
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Yes, sir . One of my friend has told me to submit it , shown me the page nd I want you to share your poem too . As your writer very well . Thinking about Rishte, Mirror or अस्तित्व। which two are better sir?
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Ok will go through them and then let you my opinion. Are the too old or recent ones
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I have written very few . Check Rishte nd Mirror . Astitv vale b
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Otherwise I will try new . Abhi time h submission k date mh
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Gargi, poems me kahin kahin thodi spelling mistakes hain submit karne se pehle unko sahi kar lena aur ‘coma’ ke bad wale lines ko ek space niche kar dena.
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Okk, sir. Meri hindi not so good . I will take care of it.
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That’s not a big deal, I also still do mistakes, e aur double ee ki matra me abhi bhi mujhse galtiyaan hoti. It’s all about learning and improvising further. I learned english in my graduation 😊 and good part is that you know about your weak ends so you will rectify it very fast. If you need any of my help in editing of poems feel free to ask, I would be the most happy person to do that. “हिंदी कविता की जो बात है”
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Honoured sir. I do let you know , after editing.
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आईना और अस्तित्व, 👍
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Okk, sir . Do it need little editing . Thanks a lot sir for suggesting me
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😊 puchne se pehle hi likh diya maine😊
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Nice one
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Thanku
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Welcome
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उम्दा लेखन।बहुत सुंदर कविता।
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Thanku sir 😊
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Bahut khoob ❤
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Thanku so much . Thanks for reading😊
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Absolutely astounding!!
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Thanku so much for your lovely comment 😊.
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My pleasure!!
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जो देखता हूँ, वही दिखलाता हूँ
भीतर का दर्पण कहलाता हूँ
Hehe very nice!
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Thanks for reading it nd visiting on my post😊
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👍 keep posting!
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Sure😊
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Best poem ever…. 👌👌
Keep writing buddy 😊
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Thanku buddy. Means a lot😊
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Welcome 😊
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Read your post after such a long time…a lot of change can be seen in your post..bahot khoob…its awesome gargi
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Thanks a lot . Would like to know what changes u have seen, bcoz I wrote these two after a long time
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You have turned out to be more professional.Your selection of words,tenses,lines and topics are well manifested.Aisa lag raha as if I am reading another gargi.I mean pehle s bahot accha but thodi serious baatein karne lagi tum
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Thanks buddy. Aisa feedback toh ab to nhi mila . It seems new for me . Mlb teaching kaam aa rhi h. Trying to improve . Bas stay connected nd aise h genuine feedback dete rehna.
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Defiinitely teaching will help you a lot and its doing its part…god bless
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God bless u too
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hey buddy… I’m not active on Instagram for some days … can I have your email id please.. coz I’m planning to write something by next year & I would need your help… So.. Please if you don’t mind giving…
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It’s okk buddy. I will send u on insta. Check out
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Alright
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https://wp.me/p8Ahzp-9g
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Thanku so much buddy for nominating me . Congratulations to u 😊
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Welcome buddy 😊
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Hi,
‘atrangizindagieksafar’ is defunct now.
I have shifted my blog to a self hosted site with a new name ‘Atrangi Zindagi Ka safar- celebrating’ life https://atrangizindagieksafar.com/
Looking forward to seeing you there.
Like, comment, follow and inspire…
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Yeah, sure
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बेहद उम्दा अभिव्यक्ति है आपकी
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Thanks a lot . Good to see u again after a long😊. Thanku so much
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Thanku 😊
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awesome
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Thanku so much .
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Amazing. Never thought that I’ll read the most beautiful hind poem on WordPress.
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Oh, that’s a huge compliment . Thanks a lot😘
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My pleasure.
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Bohot khoob yar 😄😄❣
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Thanks shubham . Thanks for reading 😊
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Wah bahut Sunder
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Thanks a lot . Thank u for reading my posts 😊
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Achaa laga bahut achha likhte ho aap
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Thanks a lot . I ‘m happy to see that you liked it 😊
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Bure logo ko hame aena dikhana chahiye
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It’s just a satire
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Beautiful.
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Thank you 😊
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